We have been doing lots of narrative writing in our class. This is Jessie's latest story.
Cinderella
Once there was a girl Cinderella. She had beautiful golden hair. Cinderella had to live with her stepmother and her stepsister. They were ugly. What she did was never good enough. The stepsisters were going to the ball. And soon the night of the ball came.
THE END
Great story Jessie I look forward to reading more from you
ReplyDeleteCould have more detail. Keep working on it. What happens at the ball? Whos hosting the ball? It's not much about Cinderella anyway. MORE DETAIL NEEDED!
ReplyDeleteDumb as Jessie. get a life. Your NOT a blinking author and you never will be. Stupid story.
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